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Ok. So I’m finally getting this up. I want to thank toc-cholat for being an awesome editor and whatnot, she is amazing. Check her out, if you don’t mind. So, now that I’ve finished, here’s the footnote thing I wrote after first finishing writing this. I think it works. but before that, I want to say that if this isn't the most Ideologically sensitive thing out there. I don't believe that if you're a kid whose mother is protective, that your mom will freak out, and I don't think that this is going to make you want to kill yourself. I sure hope not. I love you all and wish you a happy day. any ways, onwards and upwards!

 okay, stop reading, there is a proper description in the actual piece. the rest of the description has some spoilers.


Wow. That took almost three months to write, and two days to type. I hope it wasn’t too grueling to read. Just a few things, I did intentionally leave out details of why Silver is depressed. I have my own idea, but I wondered what it would be like to leave the options open. (I’m actually really curious on you your person’s opinions). And this story itself is an almost but not quite. I’d love help to improve it. Last thing I can think of at the moment, why the title? Look at Silver’s name. Now look at “live, Sarah Richards”. Live plus her initials, SR can be arranged into silver. I figured that out the night I wrote the theory. Well, I hope you didn’t hate it. See you guys around!

 

P.S. as I believe I stated at some point before, over the course of writing this, I spent a lot of time in between not even thinking of it. Also, I didn’t reread what I wrote very often, so some things might have been contradictory or awkward, or just plain badly written. I apologize for that. If you guts could point those out, that would be completely awesome.

 

P.P.S. you may have noticed a few vague mentions of her dad. I intentionally left it vague because I think her dad had something to do with her depression, whether through divorce, beating, death, or otherwise, but couldn’t think of a fitting enough story, and how to subtly incorporate it in.

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Hey, I saw this on the critique thread.

The way you've formatted the IM interactions works well, but I think you'll find digital pieces much easier to deal with if instead of indenting every new line, you double space. Like this:

These guys were kleptomaniacs. What a way to bond.
              
“Why the Meritens’ gnome?” I asked while he plopped the statue onto my night stand.


It's a lot easier for the eye to follow on a screen.